Rewrite of:How the kiwi lost his wings

We were learning to retell a myth in our own words. Our success criteria was:

• use punctuation
• have an introduction, body and conclusion
• use adjectives 
• use paragraphs
• use past tense 
  

Tanemahuta was walking through the forest and noticed his children, the trees dying. Bugs were eating them. He called to his brother Tanehokahoka to help him. Tanehokahoka called down his children, the bird.

Tanemahuta talked to the birds.

He told them about his children dying. He asked if anyone would volunteer to come down to the forest floor to save the trees.

No bird spoke.

Tanehokahoka asked Tui.

Tui said "no way hozay. I am too scared of the ground and the dark, it creeps me out"

Tanehokahoka asked pukeko.

Pukeko didn't agree he said "what! No way hozay, it is way to wet down here.

Tanehokahoka turned to pipiwharauroa.

Pipiwharauroa said "never ever, I am in the middle of building my nest.

Tanehokahoka turned to kiwi their last hope. Kiwi said "I shall"

Everyone was overjoyed. But Tanemahuta felt he should warn kiwi of the dangers. Tanemahuta said "kiwi do you still agree." Kiwi simply said "I shall"

All the other birds were punished. The kiwi was rewarded with being the most well known bird in New Zealand

By Miranda

Photo from: http://goaustralia.about.com/od/animalsandbirds/ig/Animals-and-Birds/Kiwi.htm