Thursday, November 21, 2013

The magic box

WALT: use descriptive language in poetry.
Success Criteria: I needed to use adjectives, metaphors, similes, alliteration, descriptive phrases and humour 

The magic box


I will put in my box

A magical floating zoo,
a lion with a purple mane,
and macaroni cheese.

I will put in my box 

A world of dreams,
a hard snail trail,
a slimy chocolate bar.

I will put in my box

An 100m swimming pool full of coke,
A massive white chocolate bar,
And a rainbow flavoured lollipop.

I will put in my box 

Blood dripping on a sword,
An ice block the size of an ant,
And a neon orange alien.

My box is fashioned from soft white lace
and hard gold and solid silver
with me playing tennis on the lid  
and light blue in the corners 
its hinges are brand new and shiny

 In my box i will take a swim in the deep 
ocean and wash up in a wonderful place 
on the beach! 

By Phoebe

Wednesday, November 20, 2013

My magic box

WALT: use descriptive language in poetry.
Success Criteria: I needed to use adjectives, metaphors, similes, alliteration, descriptive phrases and humour

 I will put in my box..

A bright pink pig flying in the sky
Colourful harmless fluttering grass
Swaying green spiky butterflies

 I will put in my box..

Children laughing in pain
A purple roaring in agony
The sun setting at 9am and rising at 9pm

 I will put in my box..

A small panda eating a piece of poison packed bamboo
Extremely painful burps exiting penguins mouths
An upside down mural hanging on the sun

 I will put in my box..

A roasted pelican cooking on the barbecue
 Flying fish dropping out of the sky dying from no water
 A black firework disappearing into the dark dark sky

My box is fashioned from my own blood and guts and helpless animal tears with unique animals painted on the lid and shark fins in the corners. Its hinges are made from carved devil horns.

I shall enter my box to discover all the tortured animals. I shall ride on an elephant with a plastic heart charging through the lands.

Written by: Miranda