The magic box

WALT: use descriptive language in poetry.
Success Criteria: I needed to use adjectives, metaphors, similes, alliteration, descriptive phrases and humour 

The magic box

I will put in my box

A magical floating zoo,
a lion with a purple mane,
and macaroni cheese.

I will put in my box 

A world of dreams,
a hard snail trail,
a slimy chocolate bar.

I will put in my box

An 100m swimming pool full of coke,
A massive white chocolate bar,
And a rainbow flavoured lollipop.

I will put in my box 

Blood dripping on a sword,
An ice block the size of an ant,
And a neon orange alien.

My box is fashioned from soft white lace
and hard gold and solid silver
with me playing tennis on the lid  
and light blue in the corners 
its hinges are brand new and shiny

 In my box i will take a swim in the deep 
ocean and wash up in a wonderful place 
on the beach! 

By Phoebe

My magic box

WALT: use descriptive language in poetry.
Success Criteria: I needed to use adjectives, metaphors, similes, alliteration, descriptive phrases and humour

 I will put in my box..

A bright pink pig flying in the sky
Colourful harmless fluttering grass
Swaying green spiky butterflies

 I will put in my box..

Children laughing in pain
A purple roaring in agony
The sun setting at 9am and rising at 9pm

 I will put in my box..

A small panda eating a piece of poison packed bamboo
Extremely painful burps exiting penguins mouths
An upside down mural hanging on the sun

 I will put in my box..

A roasted pelican cooking on the barbecue
 Flying fish dropping out of the sky dying from no water
 A black firework disappearing into the dark dark sky

My box is fashioned from my own blood and guts and helpless animal tears with unique animals painted on the lid and shark fins in the corners. Its hinges are made from carved devil horns.

I shall enter my box to discover all the tortured animals. I shall ride on an elephant with a plastic heart charging through the lands.

Written by: Miranda

Alien

WALT: use similes to add description to our writing.

Colour Poem

WALT: use our five senses to write descriptive colour poems.

Colour poems

WALT: use our five senses to write descriptive colour poems.

Colour poems

WALT: use our five senses to write descriptive colour poems.

Blue

Blue is dreamy

Blue is my favourite colour 

Blue is cold but warm in ways 

Blue is the sky above 

Blue tastes like the aeroplane lollies

Blue smells like the blue bulk daisy

Blue sounds like the sound of bellbirds humming in the distance

Blue feels like calmness all through the land

Blue looks cool

Blue makes me feel happy

Blue is the colour of a sapphire

By Phoebe

Adding vocab

Today Sapphire was learning to add interesting vocab to a sentence to make it more exiting. They started with the sentence: I had an ice cream for lunch. Here are some of their pieces of work.

By Aria and Charlotte

By Miranda and Alex

By Joe and Harry

By Daena and Kate

By Tobin

Toby's writing

Toby is learning to add more information to his stories.

In the weekend I was playing hockey at Papatoetoe and in my team is Bruno, Maz, Baden, Sam, Olivia, Kezia and Hamish. We lost 6-1 although last week we bet them 4-3.

After that we went to Manukau and had boneless chicken curry. I shared it with my sister. Then we went to grandma's house in Buckland.

Then we went to Buckland school and played basketball. And me and my sister stayed the night. The next day my mum and dad picked us up.

Cooper's writing

Cooper is learning how to consistently use punctuation.

Glowing crystals.

One day a researcher was off to Mars. The count off started 10,9,8,7,6,5,4,3,2,1 blast off. Te rocket went but it lost control and crashed on Mars. The he found a dead person that had a map to find the crystals that will power his ship forever. He had to jump over lava miss trap doors and not fall in holes and other dangerous stuff. He almost died two times but he got the crystals and put them in his ship.

Baden's writing

Baden is working on using interesting vocab in his stories.

There once lived a man called Dr Wazle, he was a scientist. He loves his inventions like the robot fly. His favourite animal is the fly. This scientist has bright orange hair that's an Afro. Ever since he was little he wanted to be the best scientist in the world. He wanted to invent a teleported so he could go to any destinations in the world like California, he loved that place. So he started to make a teleported. There was winding, screwing, and hammering. "Finally done," he said to himself. He turned it on and walked into it and when he came out he was a goofy looking fly!

Report writing

Toby has written a report on a chosen animal. He was learning to structure a report and use interesting vocab to describe where it lived and what it looked like.

HUSKY

The husky is a canine. The husky is black and white. It has light blue eyes. It has four legs, a wet nose and a tail.

A husky lives in the snow they sometimes suffer in the hot weather.

They use huskies to pull sleds. Huskies eat meat.

Narratives

We have been writing narratives using a dice to choose the character, setting and plot. The objective of our task was to use interesting descriptive vocab and phrases in our stories. 

Here is the beginning of Grace's narrative:

Once upon a time, thousands and millions of years ago there was a town. The town was called Cyclopsia. The town was thousands of years before dinosaurs. Cyclopsia was the town where two headed cyclops lived. No family talked much in Cyclopsia.

There was one especially quiet family, a good family, unlike all the other fierce monsters of Cyclopsia.

This family lived in a hidden cave. The cave had a large comfy couch and a kitchen smelling of freshly picked berries. The family was very happy in the cave. No one knew they lived here..........

Pigs

Lucia has written a report on a chosen animal. She was learning to structure a report and use interesting vocab to describe where it lived and what it looked like.

PIGS

Pigs are warm blooded animals that live on land. They can be pets and they can also be wild animals. Read on to find out more about pigs.

What they look like: Pigs can be a lot of colours, black, brown and pink. Most pigs are fat. They've got a cylinder shaped head, long fat body, short stubby legs and a curly little tail. They can sound like a big snort or a high pitched squeak.

How they survive in the wild: pigs survive by sleeping on the ground, drinking from lakes and feeding on dead animals or scraps.

Where it lives: Pigs live in warm atmospheres. Of its a pet they might live in a pen or kennel. They live in most parts of the world depending on the areas.

What it does: Pigs produce milk and have babies. If you kill them they give you bacon, ham and pork to eat.

Pigs are friendly and loving animals who are quite interesting and therefore pigs can be quite good pets. Even though they are a handful they are really awesome!

Kaiya's myth

We were learning to retell a myth in our own words. Our success criteria was:

• use punctuation
• have an introduction, body and conclusion
• use adjectives 
• use paragraphs
• use past tense

How the white kiwi lost its wings 

One day tanemahuta comes and ask the birds in the sky who will come down to live on the forest floor and look after my children?

And one by one tanemahuta  asked the birds of the sky this Question who will come down to live on the forest floor 

Tui will you come down to live on the forest floor? 

Tui  looked up ; no i don't wont  to leave the sunny spot up in the tree.

Pukeko ,will you come and live on the forest floor.

Pukeko looked down no i don't want to get my feet wet and muddy.

Pipiwharauroa will you come down and live on the forest floor.

Pipiwharauroa said no thank you.

Tanemahuta thought there was no other bird left. but just then kiwi came out of of the berry bush and said i will come down and live on the forest floor 


So Tanemahutas family lived happily ever after.and so did kiwi on the forest floor and that was the tale of of how the whit kiwi lost its wings 

by Kaiya Kidd.

Harry: how the kiwi lost his wings.

We were learning to retell a myth in our own words. Our success criteria was:

• use punctuation
• have an introduction, body and conclusion
• use adjectives 
• use paragraphs
• use past tense

Once upon a time there was boy named Tanemahuta . He was going for a walk through the forest. Then he noticed all his children were dieing by a dragon so Tanemahuta saved all the birds but hen he realized one was missing , the brave and mighty kiwi.

After Tanemahuta had  to attack the dragon to save kiwi.But kiwi got attacked and could not fly. They all got back to safety . Tanemahuta had to tell kiwi he had to grow big fat legs now for on the ground...

By Harry

How the spotted kiwi lost its wings, by Charlie

We were learning to retell a myth in our own words. Our success criteria was:

• use punctuation
• have an introduction, body and conclusion
• use adjectives 
• use paragraphs
• use past tense

How the spotted kiwi lost its wings

One day there was a kiwi that slept in the day and in the night it hunted for worms and insects.

This kiwi had a wonderful family. He had two other  and a mum and dad. They were all brown spotted kiwis.

The next night the kiwi  went out for a worm hunt and saw one little juicy worm in a really open area, and then two ferrets arrived and the kiwi saw them and ran and ran and ran until he ran out  of energy and the kiwi caught up to him and bit his wings off. After that his spotted family came and scared both of the ferrets away and the kiwi was not happy at  all. 

That is how the kiwi lots its wings and he never went out hunting for worms and insect without his family ever again

Joe's myth

We were learning to retell a myth in our own words. Our success criteria was:

• use punctuation
• have an introduction, body and conclusion
• use adjectives 
• use paragraphs
• use past tense 
  

One day in the forest Tanemahuta looked up to his children he noticed that bugs were eating them.

He asked his brother Tanehokahoka  who called his children the birds of the air.

Tanemahuta talked and talked about how is children were being eaten and told them to come down. He asked tui tui said he didnt like the dark so said no.

The next day Tanehokahoka asked Pukeko will you come down to the forest floor Pukeko saw the cold damp earth and said its to damp i dont want to get my feet wet sorry but no.

Then he turned to kiwi the last of them will you come down from the forest roof. Kiwi looked up at the trees then looked around and saw his family and said yol i will.

And now today the kiwi is one of the best birds in the whole world 

By Joe 

Photo from www.whakaangi.co.nz

 

Rewrite of:How the kiwi lost his wings

We were learning to retell a myth in our own words. Our success criteria was:

• use punctuation
• have an introduction, body and conclusion
• use adjectives 
• use paragraphs
• use past tense 
  

Tanemahuta was walking through the forest and noticed his children, the trees dying. Bugs were eating them. He called to his brother Tanehokahoka to help him. Tanehokahoka called down his children, the bird.

Tanemahuta talked to the birds.

He told them about his children dying. He asked if anyone would volunteer to come down to the forest floor to save the trees.

No bird spoke.

Tanehokahoka asked Tui.

Tui said "no way hozay. I am too scared of the ground and the dark, it creeps me out"

Tanehokahoka asked pukeko.

Pukeko didn't agree he said "what! No way hozay, it is way to wet down here.

Tanehokahoka turned to pipiwharauroa.

Pipiwharauroa said "never ever, I am in the middle of building my nest.

Tanehokahoka turned to kiwi their last hope. Kiwi said "I shall"

Everyone was overjoyed. But Tanemahuta felt he should warn kiwi of the dangers. Tanemahuta said "kiwi do you still agree." Kiwi simply said "I shall"

All the other birds were punished. The kiwi was rewarded with being the most well known bird in New Zealand

By Miranda

Photo from: http://goaustralia.about.com/od/animalsandbirds/ig/Animals-and-Birds/Kiwi.htm